Stoopid brother wouldn't let me get on the computer last night, so I had to wait until now to finally read it.
Ohmanohman, now Perry's a-changing.
Good to see some of the other characters. Not that JD, Perry, and Jack aren't completely adorable, but it's always good to see the others.
Speaking of completely adorable, that little JD/Cox moment was totally aww-worthy. It's scenes like that that make grin like a maniac.
I've also got a couple of errors that I saw while reading, that you might want to look at.
"...but once he left the foothills things cleared up..." I'm not sure if this is right, but you may want a comma there after foothills. (But I might be wrong, I can be a bit of a comma whore)
"When she nodded, he pulled his hand to his mouth and kissed it gently." Second his needs to be a her.
"...because if you are I will come after you." At that part, one of your l's on will isn't italicized.
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Date: 7 Jan 2007 21:40 (UTC)Ohmanohman, now Perry's a-changing.
Good to see some of the other characters. Not that JD, Perry, and Jack aren't completely adorable, but it's always good to see the others.
Speaking of completely adorable, that little JD/Cox moment was totally aww-worthy. It's scenes like that that make grin like a maniac.
I've also got a couple of errors that I saw while reading, that you might want to look at.
"...but once he left the foothills things cleared up..."
I'm not sure if this is right, but you may want a comma there after foothills. (But I might be wrong, I can be a bit of a comma whore)
"When she nodded, he pulled his hand to his mouth and kissed it gently."
Second his needs to be a her.
"...because if you are I will come after you."
At that part, one of your l's on will isn't italicized.
*salutes* Can't wait for the next part!